If I were.... Poem
If I were the Sun
I would bring warmth to everyone
I would take away the rain and dry
up the wet and soggy ground
If I were the Sun
I would make people happy with my bright
colours and would bring joy to everyone
If I were the Sun
I would help people wake up I would light up
all the dark houses and bring
morning to everyone
If I were the Sun
I would chase away the pitch black darkness
and bring light back because people feel safe
around me
Jayden Cross
I really liked how you put good reasons why you would keep everyone safe. You also created a picture in my mind!
ReplyDeleteI think you need to work on punctuation in your story.
It was a really good story, well done!!
I loved how u describe the things that your said it gave me image what u were talking about.
ReplyDeleteand i liked the cartoon sun on the bottom.
WOW amazing poem my favorite part was when you would chase away the darkness
ReplyDeleteWow I really like your poem it really puts an image in my head :)
ReplyDeleteit puts an image in my head and i like it when u said when you make people happy coz the sun makes me happy
ReplyDeleteI loved how you said i would bring joy to everyone and you said i´ll chase away the pitch black darkness good job
ReplyDeleteyou have amazing Ideas and awesome descriptive language and the sun does bring joy to everyone like me
ReplyDeleteI liked your poem because it made pictures in my head
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